Trifecta Week 62: Mouth


(Continued from Trifecta Week 61: Bitch.)

“Whoa! Got a hot date tonight?”

I look at Evan with what I hope is not a pain-ridden face. I didn’t want him to know that I still hurt. My heart churns. I hate that I’m happy to see him. It’s been a little more than a year without being in his presence. so I couldn’t help but smile. Damn it! Show some indifference!

“What are you doing here?” I raise an eyebrow at him. My apartment is right outside of downtown, but the road here has enough twist and turns that a ‘just passing by’ wouldn’t work.

“Can’t a guy visit an old friend?” He smiles at me, shrugs his shoulders, and raises those god damn gorgeous brown eyebrows at me. It’s a combination I am accustomed to seeing.

An old friend? We have long since moved on from old friends. We were once old lovers and now we have moved on to “a thing of the past”. I made a painful grimace at him, another accidental expression.

“Sorry, not the best choice of words,” he makes an uncomfortable shift in his body weight. He does that shrug of his again and lifts up one of his hands to scratch an imaginary itch behind his head.

“I know you’re probably still angry. I shouldn’t have ended things the way I did.”

Evan kneels down and awkwardly ties his shoe. He could never stand still for long.

He looks up and holds out a velvet red box with its mouth gaping at me. A beautiful round diamond ring nestles softly on its cushioned tongue.

“Carly, please marry me. I promise I will not leave you again.” Evan stares hopeful at me with a giant questioning smile.

I feel the wrinkles forming between my eyebrows. I push pass him to get into my car. My hands are shaking on the steering wheel as I look in the rear-view mirror to see him still on bended knees with a distressful expression on his face as I drive off.

(Related entry Trifecta Week 58: Survive.)

Trifecta Week Sixty-Two: Mouth

  • Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.
  • You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
  • The word itself needs to be included in your response.
  • You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.
  • Only one entry per writer.
  • Trifecta is open to everyone!! Please join us.
MOUTH (noun)

a : the natural opening through which food passes into the body of an animal and which in vertebrates is typically bounded externally by the lips and internally by the pharynx and encloses the tongue, gums, and teeth
b : grimace <made a mouth>
c : an individual requiring food <had too many mouths to feed>
a : voicespeech <finally gave mouth to her feelings>
b : mouthpiece 3a
c (1) : a tendency to excessive talk (2) : saucy or disrespectful language : impudence
: something that resembles a mouth especially in affording entrance or exit: as

a : the place where a stream enters a larger body of water

b : the surface opening of an underground cavity

c : the opening of a container

d : an opening in the side of an organ flue pipe

It’s been awhile since I’ve posted my thought process for my writing. It’s been a hectic couple of weeks for me with my grandpa in the hospital. It’s been mentally and emotionally draining. I didn’t like having to be alone with my thoughts for too long so I was going to write a little less. I thought this would help me feel less overwhelmed but I realized that writing was my own happy escape. I could create any type of story and environment I wanted. I was in control. I guess that’s why I love writing, I have complete control over what stays and what goes. Control freak? Yah… maybe a little.

My uncle had told me something over the weekend that made me realize even more that I needed to continue writing, even if it’s all gibberish and child-like. “When a mountain-climber sets out to climb a mountain, what do you think is going on in his head?” He told me and my cousin. “He’s thinking about climbing that mountain and reaching the top. This is the kind of mindset that you need to be successful. They’re in ‘the zone’ and take each step one at a time. They don’t think about the steps already made or the steps they will be making, only the next step. Thinking about the past will leave you stressed because there’s nothing you can do about it.” He continues with, “Thinking about the future is essentially useless because there is still too much uncertainty in it. You can’t predict what type of obstacles you’ll encounter.”

I’m actually not sure where I’m going with this. All I know is that it resonated, “Keep writing Kim.”

Anyways… enough rambling! The last Trifecta challenge I wrote left many of you wanting more and it also left me wanting more! I thought this week would be a great opportunity to continue it. I wasn’t sure how the story was going to continue even as I sat down to write. I just went with what “called” to me. Rather, whatever “they” told me. No, not the voices in my head, but the characters… in my head…? I guess either way it ends up being voices in my head, doesn’t it? haha…

Do any of you do that? Just wait for your characters to tell you what should happen next? Or do you have a story line already mapped out for the most part before you start writing? I’m very curious since I don’t know many others that write! Let alone talk about writing! Please share in the comments, I would really like to know!

I’m pretty excited with how this story turned out. I hope you all enjoyed it, too! Will there be another part to this? Not sure, I’ll have to wait for “them” to let me know!

15 thoughts on “Trifecta Week 62: Mouth

  1. Awww.. I’m picturing the last scene in my head.. She driving off and he standing on his knees.. Sad to end like this. But it was a good read.
    Hope your grand father gets better soon.
    I do map out a story line in my head but when I begin writing it does go in a different direction most of the time. 🙂

  2. I think this post is one of the best in terms of writing that I’ve enjoyed thus far. Loved how the story built up from the beginning. Very good use of the challenge word mouth into the story and to me it seems like your descriptive details are becoming better and better!

  3. That is excellent advice from your uncle. I wrote a post similar to that awhile back that compared it to driving. You have to focus on the road in front of you, not the destination. Do you need a route in mind? Yes. Do you need to remember where you’ve been? Yes. But your primary focus should be what’s right in front of you.

    I like the story too. I’m glad she walked away from him. He deserved it.

  4. No gibberish here, Kim. I liked your story, thanks for finishing it… I definitely approve of the ending. I tried wrinkling between my eyebrows and feel her disappointment and disdain.

    Hope your grandpa’s okay.

  5. good for carly – and good for you. I often sit down to write and find the characters do the writing. I think you will find many (most? all?) of us do the same. Keep writing, Kim!

  6. Very evocative – really let the characters play themselves! Which makes sense from what you said 🙂 The seemed very real. Life is messy just like that!

    And yeah, I let my characters tell me what they’re going to be doing. I usually start with a concept or an image comes to me and I start describing what I see, then someone walks in and I let them do the rest 🙂

  7. Am so glad she decided to walk away-she deserves much better than that sorry excuse of a man!Very well written Kim-enjoyed it totally:-)Yes,your characters did speak & so well!

    I am very new to writing,so have no idea if my inputs will be any use but I think of the idea -a brief outline- & then take it from there-let the seed grow & branch out-then prune it according to the requirements:-)

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